GMAT Sentence Correction Discussions

Was browsing the internet and found this, am afraid I won't be able to tell you what the OA is as I couldn't find it
All-terrain vehicles have allowed vacationers to reach
many previously inaccessible areas, but they have
also been blamed for causing hundreds of deaths,
injury to thousands, and seriously damaging the
nation's recreational areas.
(A) deaths, injury to thousands, and seriously
damaging
(B) deaths and injuring thousands, and serious
damage to
(C) deaths, thousands who are injured, as well as
seriously damaging
(D) deaths and thousands of injuries, as well as
doing serious damage to
(E) deaths, thousands are injured, and they do
serious damage to
I think the answer is A.
What say?
cheers
unplugged


D seems to be correct.

A:- Parallelism Error
B:- Parallelism error
C: usage of Who makes sentence incorrect.
D: Correct idiom as well as & parallelism established
E: they do - makes sentence ungrammatic.
So D
D seems to be correct.
D: Correct idiom as well as & parallelism established


I think..... in the sentences "for causing( hundreds of deaths, thousands of injuries.....)" and "for causing( hundreds of deaths, injuries to thousands)" the parallelism is maintained. The tone is maintained and the meaning is intact

I don't think that for parallelism to occur " hundreds" and "thousands" should occupy the same place ( Correct me if I am wrong)

There is a problem with D, it's unidiomatic: you don't "do" a damage, you "cause" a damage

Choice "A" is something like this......for causing( X and Y) and damaging Z....

I don't think there is any problem with "A"

Cheers,
Unplugged
@Peak Says
yeh u r rite...we in kinda same boat....I have been thinking of writing GMAT frm quite soemtime but due to wrk pressure its getting delayed....now I hve started my prep again....n plan to write somewhere end of Nov...cross my fingers to meet this one n score big...:)....these days doing OG10...once I finish OG will attempt some tests to judge my time/accuracy balance....:)...wht abt u


hi unplugged

even i giving in last week of november... i booked for 29th nov ,mumbai..what about you.

i am afraid that is nov last week give us sufficient time for our applications..

do u know what are the last dates for 2nd round..
I think..... in the sentences "for causing( hundreds of deaths, thousands of injuries.....)" and "for causing( hundreds of deaths, injuries to thousands)" the parallelism is maintained. The tone is maintained and the meaning is intact

I don't think that for parallelism to occur " hundreds" and "thousands" should occupy the same place ( Correct me if I am wrong)

There is a problem with D, it's unidiomatic: you don't "do" a damage, you "cause" a damage

Choice "A" is something like this......for causing( X and Y) and damaging Z....

I don't think there is any problem with "A"

Cheers,
Unplugged


i go with ajayreddy

parallelism for second case would have been deaths to hundreds,injuries to thousands..which is also unclear..

not the one you explained..GMAT look for clear parallelism without any ambiquity.
Was browsing the internet and found this, am afraid I won't be able to tell you what the OA is as I couldn't find it
All-terrain vehicles have allowed vacationers to reach
many previously inaccessible areas, but they have
also been blamed for causing hundreds of deaths,
injury to thousands, and seriously damaging the
nations recreational areas.
(A) deaths, injury to thousands, and seriously
damaging
(B) deaths and injuring thousands, and serious
damage to
(C) deaths, thousands who are injured, as well as
seriously damaging
(D) deaths and thousands of injuries, as well as
doing serious damage to
(E) deaths, thousands are injured, and they do
serious damage to
I think the answer is A.
What say?
cheers
unplugged


I am not even sure if such a question is worthy for GMAT (no offence to unplugged) as one cannot clearly make out what "they" in " but they..." refers to. It could refer to vehicles, vacationers or areas. comments?

But given the qustion, I would go with D as parallelism has been maintained only in D. Causing injuries and thousands of deaths goes well with doing damage
I am not even sure if such a question is worthy for GMAT (no offence to unplugged) as one cannot clearly make out what "they" in " but they..." refers to. It could refer to vehicles, vacationers or areas. comments?

But given the qustion, I would go with D as parallelism has been maintained only in D. Causing injuries and thousands of deaths goes well with doing damage


We are not here to pass comments on the complexity or the level of the questions that come up.

Rather than being judgemental its better if we help out each other and solve the problem at hand.

By they way, this question is still being discussed on 'Testmagic forums'.

Again, no offence meant!!

cheers,
Unplugged

Answer is D

Manhattan SC: Sub-Verb Agreement problem set
A majority of railway commuters reads or listens to music while traveling
Can someone pls explain why this one is correct. Why plural verb is not required here.

Also wanna know what is the form of verb to be used for hopes, proposal, desires and requests in subjunctive mood(the ones which use that)


Hey Peak,

I had asked your question to MGMAT staff and you can check their response here. I hope it is useful to all.
Hey Peak,

I had asked your question to MGMAT staff and you can check their response here. I hope it is useful to all.


Where is the response?

Have you provided some kind of an invisible link to @peak?

Cheers,
Unplugged

this is how i rembered this concept
majority of x --- majority is representing a part of whole. so verb depend on x whether it is singular,plural,collective.
group of x ...group is representing as whole entity, so verb ndependent of x whether it is singular,plural,collective.
so, it will be the first one.
hope it helps!

Where is the response?

Have you provided some kind of an invisible link to @peak?

Cheers,
Unplugged

just click on "here"...:)))
@Peak Says
just click on "here"...:)))


Got it man, Thanx!

The brightness of the laptop was set on the lower side, so couldn't make out.

Is the "Faculty" sentence clear to you all?

cheers,
Unplugged

E . Parallelism..

Got it man, Thanx!

The brightness of the laptop was set on the lower side, so couldn't make out.

Is the "Faculty" sentence clear to you all?

cheers,
Unplugged


I did not copy/paste the response here as it might have been some IPR infringement, so just gave the link.

wrt to faculty sentence..
The first sentence takes a singular verb "votes" as faculty is represented as single unti and all the members perform the same function, i.e. vote for tuition hike

In second sentence, faculty cannot be treated as a single unit (it is highly unlikely that all faculty members live in a single home) and hence "their homes" and NOT "its home".

One of my fav examples which I had quoted earlier too:
The committee has a lot of funds. (singular)
The committee were divided on the issue. (plural)

OG10:SC:Q84
One legacy of Madison Avenue's recent campaign to appeal to people fifty years old and over is the realization that as a person ages, their concerns change as well.
1)the realization that as aperson ages, their
2)the realization that as people age, their
3)to realize that when a person ages, his or her
4)to realize that when people age, their
5)realizing that as people age, their
Pls let me know ur anwsers and explanations

I think its 2

OG10:SC:Q84
One legacy of Madison Avenue's recent campaign to appeal to people fifty years old and over is the realization that as a person ages, their concerns change as well.
1)the realization that as aperson ages, their
2)the realization that as people age, their
3)to realize that when a person ages, his or her
4)to realize that when people age, their
5)realizing that as people age, their
Pls let me know ur anwsers and explanations

answer is 2

1 - incorrect singular/plural preposition.....as a person ages, "their"!!!
3,4 - to is used....read the sentence carefully:
"one legacy of _______________________ is __ ...so "the" should follow and not "to"
5 - incorrect use of 'realizing'..should start with "the"
OG10:SC:Q84
One legacy of Madison Avenue's recent campaign to appeal to people fifty years old and over is the realization that as a person ages, their concerns change as well.
1)the realization that as aperson ages, their
2)the realization that as people age, their
3)to realize that when a person ages, his or her
4)to realize that when people age, their
5)realizing that as people age, their
Pls let me know ur anwsers and explanations


i pick 2 ................

At an arientation meeting, the travelers were told that they would each need a visa, a landing card and evidence of innoculation against typhoid fever.


This is the answer given in a practice set.
I think that the part ( that they would each is idiomatically wrong. Each of them is the correct way to use the phrase)
Do you think tihs sentence is correct or do you think its wrong?


I think this sentence,eventhough in passive voice, is a better option : At the orientation meeting the travelers were told that a visa, a landing card and evidence of inoculation against typhoid fever would be needed by each of them.

help please

At an arientation meeting, the travelers were told that they would each need a visa, a landing card and evidence of innoculation against typhoid fever.


This is the answer given in a practice set.
I think that the part ( that they would each is idiomatically wrong. Each of them is the correct way to use the phrase)
Do you think tihs sentence is correct or do you think its wrong?


I think this sentence,eventhough in passive voice, is a better option : At the orientation meeting the travelers were told that a visa, a landing card and evidence of inoculation against typhoid fever would be needed by each of them.

help please


At an Orientation meeting, the travelers were told that they would each need a visa, a landing card and evidence of innoculation against typhoid fever.

At the orientation meeting the travelers were told that a visa, a landing card and evidence of inoculation against typhoid fever would be needed by each of them.

At an Orientation meeting, the travelers were told that each of them would need a visa, a landing card and evidence of innoculation against typhoid fever.

Like you said, 'Each of them' is idiomatically correct moreover, passive voice IMO is wrong almost all of the times on the GMAT, apart from being wordy in this case!

pls correct me if i am wrong