Hey Guys & Gals This thread is dedicated to AWA Essays. Request you all to Post the Issue/Argument and your essay.
Hey Guys & Gals
This thread is dedicated to AWA Essays.
Request you all to Post the Issue/Argument and your essay.
The following appeared in a proposal from the sheriff of Adams County.
This year the number of teenage drivers involved in traffic accidents here in Adams County has increased by 200 percent, and officers from the county sheriffs department have cited a record high number of teenagers for violations of traffic laws. To deal with this increasingly serious problem, the now-optional drivers education course at Adams County High School should become a required course for all students before their graduation. Furthermore, the board of education should purchase 10 new cars to provide all students in the classes with extensive on-the-road driving experience.
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
The author concludes that the now optional drivers education course at Adams County High School should be made a necessary course for all students before their graduation because of increase in number of teenagers involved in accidents. The authors line of reasoning is that making this course mandatory will help in reducing the involvement of teenagers in accidents. However, this argument is unconvincing for several reasons. The Author assumes that making the course mandatory at Adams School will curb this problem. May be there are several other schools. Its not clearly cited how violation of traffic is leading to increase in accidents. No evidence is provided about the number of students currently taking the course and its effectiveness in making them a better driver in the argument. If all the above issues are addressed effectively, the argument can certainly become convincing in every respect.
First of all, the argument is based on a serious questionable assumption that there is only one high school in the county. It has been assumed that by implementing a solution there, it can help in reducing the involvement of teenagers in traffic accidents. It is possible that those schools may not make the course mandatory for students before graduation. This will leave the problem unchanged. The author should have given information about other schools in the country to make realistic and relevant.
Secondly, the situation has not been clearly described by the author. It has been described that teenagers are involved in the accidents. The author easily assumes that teenagers are responsible for the accidents. It may be possible that they may be the victims of accidents caused by other grown up people. If it was clearly mentioned in the argument that in an accident, from both sides teenagers were involved then the authors viewpoint could have been convincing.
Thirdly, it is not very certain how violation of traffic rules can lead to increase in accidents. The author should have given evidences about the kind of violations that are triggering accidents. Violations such as not wearing seat belt, crossing the stop line and having tinted glasses do not contribute in increasing number of accidents. However, jumping traffic signal, over speeding and rash driving do lead to increase in accidents. A clear evidence about kind of violations would definitely make the situation clear and convincing.
Finally, there is no evidence about the number of students currently taking the course and its effectiveness in making teenagers a better driver. May be the course is outdated and does not help in reducing the number of accidents. The author should have given example showing how after taking the course, the number of accidents reduced. Along with this, some statistics about percentage students enrolled in the course should be given to have a broader and clearer picture of the current situation.
On the whole, It can be possible that teenage drivers are involved in rising number of accidents. This is however, convincing only if the assumptions stated above such as clarity on other schools in the county, involvement of other people in accidents and effectiveness of the course are addressed .
This year the number of teenage drivers involved in traffic accidents here in Adams County has increased by 200 percent, and officers from the county sheriffs department have cited a record high number of teenagers for violations of traffic laws. To deal with this increasingly serious problem, the now-optional drivers education course at Adams County High School should become a required course for all students before their graduation. Furthermore, the board of education should purchase 10 new cars to provide all students in the classes with extensive on-the-road driving experience.
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
The author concludes that the now optional drivers education course at Adams County High School should be made a necessary course for all students before their graduation because of increase in number of teenagers involved in accidents. The authors line of reasoning is that making this course mandatory will help in reducing the involvement of teenagers in accidents. However, this argument is unconvincing for several reasons. The Author assumes that making the course mandatory at Adams School will curb this problem. May be there are several other schools. Its not clearly cited how violation of traffic is leading to increase in accidents. No evidence is provided about the number of students currently taking the course and its effectiveness in making them a better driver in the argument. If all the above issues are addressed effectively, the argument can certainly become convincing in every respect.
First of all, the argument is based on a serious questionable assumption that there is only one high school in the county. It has been assumed that by implementing a solution there, it can help in reducing the involvement of teenagers in traffic accidents. It is possible that those schools may not make the course mandatory for students before graduation. This will leave the problem unchanged. The author should have given information about other schools in the country to make realistic and relevant.
Secondly, the situation has not been clearly described by the author. It has been described that teenagers are involved in the accidents. The author easily assumes that teenagers are responsible for the accidents. It may be possible that they may be the victims of accidents caused by other grown up people. If it was clearly mentioned in the argument that in an accident, from both sides teenagers were involved then the authors viewpoint could have been convincing.
Thirdly, it is not very certain how violation of traffic rules can lead to increase in accidents. The author should have given evidences about the kind of violations that are triggering accidents. Violations such as not wearing seat belt, crossing the stop line and having tinted glasses do not contribute in increasing number of accidents. However, jumping traffic signal, over speeding and rash driving do lead to increase in accidents. A clear evidence about kind of violations would definitely make the situation clear and convincing.
Finally, there is no evidence about the number of students currently taking the course and its effectiveness in making teenagers a better driver. May be the course is outdated and does not help in reducing the number of accidents. The author should have given example showing how after taking the course, the number of accidents reduced. Along with this, some statistics about percentage students enrolled in the course should be given to have a broader and clearer picture of the current situation.
On the whole, It can be possible that teenage drivers are involved in rising number of accidents. This is however, convincing only if the assumptions stated above such as clarity on other schools in the county, involvement of other people in accidents and effectiveness of the course are addressed .