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Hello all,
this is my first post in pagalguy.com. so hearty welcome to myself.

will start my pagalguy journey with a candid introduction of myself - 7+ years experienced IT sheep (oh! now a days i am a shepherd as well ), GMAT score of 720, average acads and "also participated" extra curricular activities.

objective for pursuing MBA - ??:

i hope to gain some knowledge & wisdom from you all and promise to spread more insanity .

hey
is it advisable to tk help of consultants for SOP?

why not?
though one needs to be careful of the fact, that the person who you take help from, does not go ahead and script the entire SOP himself.

SOP is a very personal thing. it can say a lot about you in very few words. taking help from ppl is fine as long as the writeup is still something essentially urs, with a few adjustments from experts. if it goes to the extent that it is completely modified, and the end result is very different from what u have written, then its time to stop doing that.

panelists can clearly sense the tone and language in your SOP and compare that to what u are actually saying in the interview. high-profile words in ur SOP and a bad grammar in the way you talk, can tell a lot of things



Bharath

hey
is it advisable to tk help of consultants for SOP?

Sex bomb man... a really Sexy one...
Thanks a ton....

oh ok, i didnt realize that.

probably we can rewrite it like this then.

During my career at XYZ spanning 26 months, i was given an opportunity to lead a team due to the diligence i showed at work. even though i led the team successfully, and got a lot of recognition and appreciation for the same, looking back i feel that i could have done much better at the added responsibility i was given.

This incited me to earn a management degree ....

Bharath

Sex bomb man... a really Sexy one...
Thanks a ton....

Thanks for help bharat.

but doesn't it signify that my designation was Team leader? I actually wasn't a team leader. I just got one opportunity to lead a project... i led the project successfully and then left the company.
Please comment.

oh ok, i didnt realize that.

probably we can rewrite it like this then.

During my career at XYZ spanning 26 months, i was given an opportunity to lead a team due to the diligence i showed at work. even though i led the team successfully, and got a lot of recognition and appreciation for the same, looking back i feel that i could have done much better at the added responsibility i was given.

This incited me to earn a management degree ....

Bharath

lets rephrase your SOP...

In my career spanning 26 months; I realized that I had committed many mistake(s) as a team leader,though my hard work helped me a lot in getting the opportunity to Successfully lead a project.

This experience incited me to earn a Management Degree so that I (could) get a deep knowledge of Business and its principles and emerge as a true Leader.

we have now substantially reduced the size of your SOP, you can go ahead and use this space for adding some extra info, something that has not been already discussed. or just leave it at that.

Bharath

Thanks for help bharat.

but doesn't it signify that my designation was Team leader? I actually wasn't a team leader. I just got one opportunity to lead a project... i led the project successfully and then left the company.
Please comment.

Hi Guys,

I've written an SOP for TAPMI. They've provided just 6 lines in the form for SOP and haven't specified any word limit. So I think this much will be fine(length wise).

Please do check it and tell me if you find anything that shall be modified.

In my career spanning 26 months; though my hard work helped me a lot in getting the opportunity to lead a project, and though I was able to lead the project successfully also, I realized that I had committed many a mistake as a team leader.
This experience incited me to earn a Management Degree so that I get a deep knowledge of Business and its principles and emerge as a true Leader.

lets rephrase your SOP...

In my career spanning 26 months; I realized that I had committed many mistake(s) as a team leader,though my hard work helped me a lot in getting the opportunity to Successfully lead a project.

This experience incited me to earn a Management Degree so that I (could) get a deep knowledge of Business and its principles and emerge as a true Leader.

we have now substantially reduced the size of your SOP, you can go ahead and use this space for adding some extra info, something that has not been already discussed. or just leave it at that.



Bharath

Hi Guys,

I've written an SOP for TAPMI. They've provided just 6 lines in the form for SOP and haven't specified any word limit. So I think this much will be fine(length wise).

Please do check it and tell me if you find anything that shall be modified.

"Having completed my bachelors in Computer Engineering, I joined as an Embedded Engineer in a firm named eInfochips.

In my career spanning 26 months; though my hard work helped me a lot in getting the opportunity to lead a project, and though I was able to lead the project successfully also, I realized that I had committed many a mistake as a team leader.
This experience incited me to earn a Management Degree so that I get a deep knowledge of Business and its principles and emerge as a true Leader.

I believe that TAPMI, being one of the finest Institutes in India for management studies, will definitely help me in achieving my goals."

My first SOP...My first SOP...and I like it...

Thanks ....
i didn't know threads had already been started !!!!!

Vicky, rather, Dr.Vicky, Coupla points :)

Firstly, you aren't alone in wanting to do an MBA post MBBS. Look around the forum and you'll find other similar people.

Secondly, as for the SOP, do note that a SOP answers specific queries which an institute might have about your candidature. Not all schools ask for one (although almost all International schools invariably have essays)...And no, CAT form doesn't ask you for one, atleast as yet .Once you start apping and come across a requirement from any school, then sit down and write your SOP and post back and someone from the community will be more than glad to help you refine it. A generic serve-all SOP doesn't exist. All da best :)

Cheers

hi
it may sound surprising to you all but ........
i have completed my mbbs and wish to appear to cat 2007. i don't know much about sop ...... is it compulsary for all ???? is it required to be sent along with the cat forms ?????????
i have written my sop from what i could understand by reading the previous posts.
"Small opportunities are often the beginning of great enterprises."
-Demosthenes
Health care is considered to be the world's largest industry today. It is said to be the fastest growing private consumption category & with the growth of population the need for health care service has increased tremendously in the last decade.
Like other industries, the health sector also needs managers with skills to develop practical, systems- oriented solutions.
As an undergraduate student of MBBS, along with learning about medical science and treating the patients I also came across the various aspects of doctor-patient relationship as well as doctor-administrative responsibilities. I studied at SMIMER hospital, which is a 750-bed hospital run by Surat Municipal Corporation. Studying in a hospital operating on such a large-scale aroused my curiosity in administration and the managerial aspects/responsibilities that a doctor has to take. Along with my studies of medical subject I also observed the effectiveness of administrative panel of the hospital, the commitment of doctor towards treating the patients, the satisfaction among the patients. It made me realize the tremendous potential in the sector. During my internship posting, I had d first hand experience of ground-level scenario of the doctor-patient issues as well as the administrative compulsions.
I started viewing hospitals as quality-oriented and results-driven commercial enterprises, operating in a fiercely competitive global environment. For a smoother working of a hospital, to ensure better services to the patients, there would be a need for professionals to run the management of the hospitals, as effective management leads to increased efficiency and productivity.
An MBA helps me develop my personal career in a changing and expanding health sector. Knowledge about the managerial and financial basics of corporate world along with my medical capabilities would empower me to undertake a wider range of administrative and managerial responsibilities in the socially responsible field of health.
I believe,
"If your success is not on your own terms, if it looks good to the world but does not feel good in your heart, it is not success at all."
For me success means to use my management skills and expertise in the field of medicine in a creative and analytical way - thus generating added value for my company while playing a key role in developing health services and systems.

I had a quick question. If the word limit is a certain no of words say, is it preferable to write an essay that is close to the word limit, or does the word limit merely indicate a preferable upper ceiling?
For instance if ISB prescribes a word limit of 400 words, should one stick to 380 to 400 words or would it look better if one can wrap up everything one has to say in substantially fewer words?

Specifically in the case of ISB, the word limit cannot be violated as ISB's online application system does not allow you to enter even a word more than the limit. So, if they have mentioned 400 words as the limit, you cannot exceed that. Period. At least, thats how it was last year.

This is a good indicator to the extent of the importance of the word limit. If the school has mentioned 500 words, I would recommend everybody to limit the essay to 500 words. Nothing more than that. Even though, people say that writing 5-10% above the word limit is fine, I would not go beyond the limit. Moreover, if you have written something in 530 words, I am sure you can write the same thing without compromising any relevant information in 500 words. Initially, it becomes tough. But after reviewing and editing your drafts for few times, you will be amazed with your ability to compress tons of information in few hundred words.

dude.can u send me some of ur best sop so that it would help me in getting a seat in one of the b schools
regards
karthik

I don't have mine, but I guess you could look up a more popular one here ;-)

Help yourselves before asking someone else to help ya !

dude.can u send me some of ur best sop so that it would help me in getting a seat in one of the b schools
regards
karthik

Boss SOP is something which you should write about why you want to do an MBA etc ..
read the previous posts in this thread and you will get an idea of how to go about it..
you write your SOP and post it here we will edit it if required and help you out..
This thread is not for sending SOP's:)..pls understand..

dude.can u send me some of ur best sop so that it would help me in getting a seat in one of the b schools
regards
karthik

I had a quick question. If the word limit is a certain no of words say, is it preferable to write an essay that is close to the word limit, or does the word limit merely indicate a preferable upper ceiling?
For instance if ISB prescribes a word limit of 400 words, should one stick to 380 to 400 words or would it look better if one can wrap up everything one has to say in substantially fewer words?

@Pakya : It was a nive and well rounded SOP, and given your fab GMAT score it should go a long way in making your application irresistible for prospective B schools. ATB

I wouldn't completely agree with bharatraj.....

As I see it, if a school has mentioned a word limit, they do it for good reason. Undermining that reasoning and overshooting or playing too safe aren't exactly the best options, imho....Write your essays, get 'em reviewed, read, re-read and re-read again. Am sure you could do a great job in cutting down the flab in the process enhance the overall quality of the write-up... :)

Cheers

B-Schools obviously dont go to the extent of actually counting the number of words you have written, and then disqulify u if u have exceeded the word count.

word count is just a way for B-Schools to keep a limit to all the unreal things one put in their SOP. :P

it always is better to keep ur SOP close to the word limit, it does not matter if u keep it under or over it, but keep it close

if 400 is specified then 420 or even 450 should not be a problem, but this again is very dependant on the person who reads your SOP


bharath

I had a quick question. If the word limit is a certain no of words say, is it preferable to write an essay that is close to the word limit, or does the word limit merely indicate a preferable upper ceiling?
For instance if ISB prescribes a word limit of 400 words, should one stick to 380 to 400 words or would it look better if one can wrap up everything one has to say in substantially fewer words?

@Pakya : It was a nive and well rounded SOP, and given your fab GMAT score it should go a long way in making your application irresistible for prospective B schools. ATB

Very useful thread......

Thanks bharathraj1. I saw this thread had been idle for a long time and was wondering if anyone will respond.

Hi,

I have written a sample SOP. Initially I intended on writting a "school-independent" SOP, but then for the sake of clarity wrote one for "ISB" . word length = 260 (approx). Please comment and point out pitfalls. I want to prepare such essays in advance, so that as soon as applications are open, I can get started and get any "early-bird" advantage.

That was a good one boss.
you have explained your strength very beautifully.
i dont see anyplace where a substantial improvement can be done.
untill unless you weigh in on any points and decide to replace it with a more stronger, more appealing point, if any.
all the best


bharath

Hi,

I have written a sample SOP. Initially I intended on writting a "school-independent" SOP, but then for the sake of clarity wrote one for "ISB" . word length = 260 (approx). Please comment and point out pitfalls. I want to prepare such essays in advance, so that as soon as applications are open, I can get started and get any "early-bird" advantage.
FYI already completed GMAT with score of 770.
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As a software engineer and later a team leader in Infosys, I acquired various skills in design, leadership and managing quality standards of a project. Especially, last two years of my stay in USA was a multi-dimentional experience. Interacting with people from culturally diverse backgrounds - Americans, Russians, French and Chinese - has been interesting and a learning in itself. Organizing an org-wide event for New York employees made me realize that my organization skills were not limited by boundaries. And when client manager gave me full credits on "overall satisfaction" during feedback, I knew this feedback spoke about my professional excellence. Even during my academic career, I have been always known as a promising student. I have organized and participated in various activities like skit, orchestra, dance, raising sponsorship for college functions. I also represented handball team at state level and lead ball-badminton team for school.
I see this as a right time to stretch my wings and pursue next ambition that is moving to a solutions provider role. Equipped with the business knowledge that I will gain during MBA, I wish to join a consultancy where I could help corporations in deciding strategy for future and resolve any business problems. With my leadership skills and diverse experience, I can work towards establishing strong relationships with clients and create opportunities for growth and development of the company. ISB having its association and exchange program with leading Business schools from US, Europe and rest of the world will provide me exposure to international business scenario. While outstanding resedential and visiting faculty and an excellent "learning resource centre" makes ISB stand out as a knowledge hub, the centres of excellence symbolize institution's commitment to research and innovation. With well placed alumni network and excellent placement record, I see ISB as the perfect career launch pad and a big step towards realizing my career goals.
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Ok, shoot ...

Hi,

I have written a sample SOP. Initially I intended on writting a "school-independent" SOP, but then for the sake of clarity wrote one for "ISB" . word length = 260 (approx). Please comment and point out pitfalls. I want to prepare such essays in advance, so that as soon as applications are open, I can get started and get any "early-bird" advantage.
FYI already completed GMAT with score of 770.
==============================================
As a software engineer and later a team leader in Infosys, I acquired various skills in design, leadership and managing quality standards of a project. Especially, last two years of my stay in USA was a multi-dimentional experience. Interacting with people from culturally diverse backgrounds - Americans, Russians, French and Chinese - has been interesting and a learning in itself. Organizing an org-wide event for New York employees made me realize that my organization skills were not limited by boundaries. And when client manager gave me full credits on "overall satisfaction" during feedback, I knew this feedback spoke about my professional excellence. Even during my academic career, I have been always known as a promising student. I have organized and participated in various activities like skit, orchestra, dance, raising sponsorship for college functions. I also represented handball team at state level and lead ball-badminton team for school.
I see this as a right time to stretch my wings and pursue next ambition that is moving to a solutions provider role. Equipped with the business knowledge that I will gain during MBA, I wish to join a consultancy where I could help corporations in deciding strategy for future and resolve any business problems. With my leadership skills and diverse experience, I can work towards establishing strong relationships with clients and create opportunities for growth and development of the company. ISB having its association and exchange program with leading Business schools from US, Europe and rest of the world will provide me exposure to international business scenario. While outstanding resedential and visiting faculty and an excellent "learning resource centre" makes ISB stand out as a knowledge hub, the centres of excellence symbolize institution's commitment to research and innovation. With well placed alumni network and excellent placement record, I see ISB as the perfect career launch pad and a big step towards realizing my career goals.
==================================

Ok, shoot ...

well......
SOP is a personilised stuff abanchii.
u can write anything in it as long as u can prove urself.
seldom do they predecide the entrance of a student based on SOP.
as i said yesterday, ur SOP is fine.
more importantly if u think its fine, seal it off


bharath

Bharat thanks a lot pal. You have helped me out a lot. I really hope to interact with you soon.

Thanks again

Bharat
Thank you again for helping me out. I do understand the point you have made. I do agree with you the "job satisfaction" and "marketeing" thing. But what abt the Statements A and B (mensioned below) which were a part of my earlier SOP? Do you think that these are unnecessary? Or do I need to make these statements in a differerent manner in another part of my essay?
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well......
SOP is a personilised stuff abanchii.
u can write anything in it as long as u can prove urself.
seldom do they predecide the entrance of a student based on SOP.
as i said yesterday, ur SOP is fine.
more importantly if u think its fine, seal it off


bharath

i can see a very big difference in ur SOP from yesterday
GOOD JOB.
but i still find certain information redundant.
the part where u go explaining about MBA (last but two para) is un-needed.
the reason im saying that is because u might be questioned on that during their interview.
the panel will have a different outlook towards marketing and they might cross-question u on that. because after all they know better about management that u do.
the last para is good.
thats ur best statement.
and regarding ur question on SOP, generally they expect it to be withing the specified limit.
most institutes give certain number of lines following the question.
if u exceed u will have to be writting in the blank spaces and that doesnt look good.
they go through the SOP and u can be questioned on that.
but there is no ground rule.
there has been instances where one panelist sits there reading ur SOP and the other questioning u on various things.
do post ur SOP if u make any further modifications


bharath

Bharat
Thank you again for helping me out. I do understand the point you have made. I do agree with you the "job satisfaction" and "marketeing" thing. But what abt the Statements A and B (mensioned below) which were a part of my earlier SOP? Do you think that these are unnecessary? Or do I need to make these statements in a differerent manner in another part of my essay?
Statement A : For me MBA is not just a degree that is only beneficial for a person's career. A proper MBA will equip one to handle various situations in his personal and daily life.
Statement B : I believe that SJMSOM will be the best in providing me this knowledge since a student can choose from a wide range of electives and can pursue his career interests.
I have altered the above statements and mensioned thsese in a different part of my modified essay. The above two statements are underlined in my SOP below.
I believe that the main purpose of an SOP is to provide answers to two important questions which are why MBA and why this institute? Do you think my essay is correctly addressed and does it cover all the corners that it should? Do give necessary suggestions on how to improve my SOP and feel free to add or convey anything you like.
Thanks a lot
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Performance is probably one of the most important aspects in life that a person thrives to attain, be it in any field of life; and I want to perform to the fullest of my abilities.
I have completed my four-year Bachelor of Technology program from Heritage Institute of Technology, Kolkata. I graduated in 2006 with a degree in Electronics and Communication Engineering. I would consider my punctuality and my determination as my strengths and I am also quick in learning from my mistakes.
Throughout my undergraduate career I have tried not to restrict my activities to those imposed by the syllabus. I have been an active member of the cultural committee of my college's annual intercollegiate festival "Eclecia" in the years 2004 and 2005. I took charge of making proper arrangements at the venue in our college, sequencing the programs and events, etc. I was also appointed as the class representative for more than a year in my college. I won the first prize in a computer gaming tournament named "Blitzkrieg" in the year 2004 in Kolkata. I was involved in organizing blood donation camps in our college and neighborhood and did give my blood on various occasions.
Being a human being, my first and foremost objective is to have a good set of moral values. My parents have always played an active part in my upbringing, which in term has shaped my character and I do believe I have learned positive qualities from my parents like honesty and respect. Next comes the priority of setting my career goals right. Having a technical background, I would very much like to do my MBA from a premier institute like SJMSOM and finally join an establishment where I will have the scope and freedom to show my skills, strengthen my team working proficiency, gain experience and become a successful manager. For me MBA is not just a degree that is only beneficial for a person's career; a proper MBA will equip one to handle various situations in his personal and daily life.
I am very interested in Telecom and Automotive sectors; if I have the opportunity I would really like to be a part of any of these fields and I think I will be able to perform my best possible.
IIT Bombay is one of the most premier and well-established institutions in India, which provides sound courses for both technical and management education. Every faculty of SJMSOM are pioneers in their own fields and the industrial interactions and the seminars that are held for the students are outstanding; this in itself provides a platform for excellence. SJMSOM students can choose from a wide range of electives according to their career interests, which I feel is really beneficial for a student. The institute also provides quality education with a low fee structure that is hard to find these days. In today's world mangers need to have diverse knowledge and they should also be aware of how the two different interact with each other to and how they can form a winning package. Being an engineer, doing MBA from IIT Bombay will be the most adept and beneficial for me since I believe that the MBA program of IIT Bombay will be able to couple my technical knowledge successfully with the managerial skills that will be taught which I think will be a winning package for me. This will be the solid base on which I can build a successful career. Also I do believe that SJMSOM will be able to hone my acquired skills and imbibe in me all the other important skill sets required to become an accomplished manager. Being a part of the IIT fraternity will be my honour and privilege.
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Bharath

Thanks a lot pal for your help in guiding me in the right directions. I have tried to make the necessary changes in my SOP and I'm posting it below. Please feel free to comment on it.

.................

Performance is probably one of the most important aspects in life that a person thrives to attain, be it in any field of life. And I want to perform to the fullest of my abilities.
I graduated in 2006 with a degree in Electronics and Communication Engineering from Heritage Institute of Technology, Kolkata.
Throughout my undergraduate career I have tried not to restrict my activities to those imposed by the syllabus. I have been an active member of the cultural committee of my college's annual intercollegiate festival "Eclecia" in the years 2004 and 2005, during my tenure I took charge of making proper arrangements at the venue in our college, sequencing of the programs and events. I was also appointed the class representative for consecutive years in my college. I won the first prize in a computer gaming tournament named "Blitzkrieg" in the year 2004 in Kolkata. I was also involved in organizing blood donation camps in our college and neighborhood and did give my blood on various occations.
Being a human being, my first and foremost objective is to have a good set of moral values; My parents have always played an active part in my upbringing which in term has shaped my character and I do believe I have learned positive qualities from my parents like honesty and respect.I would consider my punctuality and my determination as my strengths and I am also quick in learning from my mistakes. Next comes the priority of setting my career goals right. Having a technical background, I would very much like to do my MBA from a premier institute like SJMSOM and finally join an establishment where I will have the scope and freedom to show my skills, strengthen my team working proficiency, gain experience and become a successful manager. (But more than anything, I believe that the most important thing that counts is job satisfaction. If an individual at work is unsatisfied with the professional environment he is in, that individual will not be able to give his best to the organization.)
(For me MBA is not just a degree that is only beneficial for a person's career. A proper MBA will equip one to handle various situations in his personal and daily life. I plan to specialize in Marketing during my MBA studies since I believe I will be able to successfully understand the target audience's needs and ultimately deliver them the best possible. A manager also need to have knowledge in various fields, so I also wish to acquire essential information in other important fields like Operations and General Management to get an overall business know-how. I believe that SJMSOM will be the best in providing me this knowledge since a student can choose from a wide range of electives and can pursue his career interests.)
I am very interested in Telecom and Automotive sectors and I would like to work in any of these fields if I have the opportunity and I think I will be able to perform my best possible.
IIT Bombay is one of the most premier and well-established institutions in India, which provides sound courses for both technical and management education. Every faculty of SJMSOM are pioneers in their own fields and the industrial interactions and the seminars that are held for the students are outstanding; this in itself provides a platform for excellence. In today's world mangers need to have diverse knowledge and they should also be aware of how the two different interact with each other to and how they can form a winning package. Being an engineer, doing MBA from IIT Bombay will be the most adept and beneficial for me since I believe that the MBA program of IIT Bombay will be able to couple my technical knowledge successfully with the managerial skills that will be taught which I think will be a winning package. This will be the solid base on which I can build a successful career. Also I do believe that SJMSOM will be able to hone my acquired skills and imbibe in me all the other important skill sets required to become an accomplished manager. For me being a part of the IIT fraternity will be my honour and privilege.
.................



i can see a very big difference in ur SOP from yesterday
GOOD JOB.
but i still find certain information redundant.
the part where u go explaining about MBA (last but two para) is un-needed.
the reason im saying that is because u might be questioned on that during their interview.
the panel will have a different outlook towards marketing and they might cross-question u on that. because after all they know better about management that u do.
the last para is good.
thats ur best statement.
and regarding ur question on SOP, generally they expect it to be withing the specified limit.
most institutes give certain number of lines following the question.
if u exceed u will have to be writting in the blank spaces and that doesnt look good.
they go through the SOP and u can be questioned on that.
but there is no ground rule.
there has been instances where one panelist sits there reading ur SOP and the other questioning u on various things.
do post ur SOP if u make any further modifications


bharath

Dude.....
its good in a way that u have told whatever is there in ur mind.
but it sounds more like ur talking hype rather than facts.
E.G. u have told that an MBA from IIT will help u hone ur technical knowledge and managerial skillls, but how?
what makes u think it will be that way?
i dont see any part where u have tried to put forth ur strength.
also, why IITB/how IITB will help u is lacking.
try to give any example of what u did in the cultural commitee.
any suggestions u brought, that will validate ur points.
u say u have learnt values from ur parents. what are those?
how do u think they influenced you.

basically everybody wld say things like these. and the folks who read ur SOP would be so used to these creamy things everybody throw at them.
u need to make ur SOP stand out. there has to be a few interesting things added.
they need to feel "ok this guy is just not all talk, he does know a few things"
i wld recommend u to go thru a couple of SOP in this thread and get an idea.
post it back, we will look into it

all the best
bharath

Bharath

Thanks a lot pal for your help in guiding me in the right directions. I have tried to make the necessary changes in my SOP and I'm posting it below. Please feel free to comment on it.

And one more thing is that IIT Bombay has asked me to make it in only a single page, now my SOP is of about 750 words and has taken a full page, dose size matter in an SOP? Will they be going through the full SOP or pick out essential points during the interview?

Thanks again


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Performance is probably one of the most important aspects in life that a person thrives to attain, be it in any field of life. And I want to perform to the fullest of my abilities.
I have completed my four-year Bachelor of Technology program from Heritage Institute of Technology, Kolkata. I graduated in 2006 with a degree in Electronics and Communication Engineering. I would consider my punctuality and my determination as my strengths and I am also quick in learning from my mistakes.
Throughout my undergraduate career I have tried not to restrict my activities to those imposed by the syllabus. I have been an active member of the cultural committee of my college's annual intercollegiate festival "Eclecia" in the years 2004 and 2005. I took charge of making proper arrangements at the venue in our college, sequencing the programs and events, etc. I was also appointed as the class representative for more than a year in my college. I won the first prize in a computer gaming tournament named "Blitzkrieg" in the year 2004 in Kolkata. I was involved in organizing blood donation camps in our college and neighborhood and did give my blood on various occations.
Being a human being, my first and foremost objective is to have a good set of moral values; My parents have always played an active part in my upbringing which in term has shaped my character and I do believe I have learned positive qualities from my parents like honesty and respect. Next comes the priority of setting my career goals right. Having a technical background, I would very much like to do my MBA from a premier institute like SJMSOM and finally join an establishment where I will have the scope and freedom to show my skills, strengthen my team working proficiency, gain experience and become a successful manager. But more than anything, I believe that the most important thing that counts is job satisfaction. If an individual at work is unsatisfied with the professional environment he is in, that individual will not be able to give his best to the organization.
For me MBA is not just a degree that is only beneficial for a person's career. A proper MBA will equip one to handle various situations in his personal and daily life. I plan to specialize in Marketing during my MBA studies since I believe I will be able to successfully understand the target audience's needs and ultimately deliver them the best possible. A manager also need to have knowledge in various fields, so I also wish to acquire essential information in other important fields like Operations and General Management to get an overall business know-how. I believe that SJMSOM will be the best in providing me this knowledge since a student can choose from a wide range of electives and can pursue his career interests.
I am very interested in Telecom and Automotive sectors and I would like to work in any of these fields if I have the opportunity and I think I will be able to perform my best possible.
IIT Bombay is one of the most premier and well-established institutions in India, which provides sound courses for both technical and management education. Every faculty of SJMSOM are pioneers in their own fields and the industrial interactions and the seminars that are held for the students are outstanding; this in itself provides a platform for excellence. In today's world mangers need to have diverse knowledge and they should also be aware of how the two different interact with each other to and how they can form a winning package. Being an engineer, doing MBA from IIT Bombay will be the most adept and beneficial for me since I believe that the MBA program of IIT Bombay will be able to couple my technical knowledge successfully with the managerial skills that will be taught which I think will be a winning package. This will be the solid base on which I can build a successful career. Also I do believe that SJMSOM will be able to hone my acquired skills and imbibe in me all the other important skill sets required to become an accomplished manager. For me being a part of the IIT fraternity will be my honour and privilege.
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Guys now that the IIT Bombay GD/PI sessions are arround the corner and they have asked for our SOPs. I am posting my SOP below. Puys please help me out with my SOP and do suggest if any sort of rectification is needed to make it better. Hope to see your replys soon......
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Dude.....
its good in a way that u have told whatever is there in ur mind.
but it sounds more like ur talking hype rather than facts.
E.G. u have told that an MBA from IIT will help u hone ur technical knowledge and managerial skillls, but how?
what makes u think it will be that way?
i dont see any part where u have tried to put forth ur strength.
also, why IITB/how IITB will help u is lacking.
try to give any example of what u did in the cultural commitee.
any suggestions u brought, that will validate ur points.
u say u have learnt values from ur parents. what are those?
how do u think they influenced you.

basically everybody wld say things like these. and the folks who read ur SOP would be so used to these creamy things everybody throw at them.
u need to make ur SOP stand out. there has to be a few interesting things added.
they need to feel "ok this guy is just not all talk, he does know a few things"
i wld recommend u to go thru a couple of SOP in this thread and get an idea.
post it back, we will look into it

all the best
bharath

Guys now that the IIT Bombay GD/PI sessions are arround the corner and they have asked for our SOPs. I am posting my SOP below. Puys please help me out with my SOP and do suggest if any sort of rectification is needed to make it better. Hope to see your replys soon......
Performance is probably one of the most important aspects in life that a person thrives to attain, be it in any field of life. And I want to perform to the fullest of my abilities.
I have completed my four-year Bachelor of Technology program from Heritage Institute of Technology, Kolkata. I graduated in 2006 with a degree in Electronics and Communication Engineering.
I have tried, throughout my undergraduate career, not to restrict my activities to those imposed by the syllabus. I have been a member of the cultural committee of my colleges annual intercollegiate festival. I was also appointed as the class representative for more than a year in my college. I also won the first prize in a computer gaming tournament named Blitzkrieg in the year 2004 in Kolkata.
Being a human being, my first and foremost objective is to have a good set of moral values, this I learned from my parents from a very young age. Next comes the priority of setting my career goals right. Having a technical background, I would very much like to do my MBA from a premier institute and finally join an establishment where I will have the scope and freedom to show my skills, strengthen my team working proficiency, gain experience and become a successful manager. But more than anything, I believe that the most important thing that counts is job satisfaction. If an individual at work is unsatisfied with the professional environment he is in, that individual will not be able to give his/her best to the organization.
For me MBA is not just a degree that is only beneficial for a persons career. A proper MBA will equip a student to handle various situations in his/her personal or daily life. I plan to specialize in Marketing during my MBA studies since I believe that I am good in interacting with people and I will be able to successfully understand the needs of a customer or a client. I also wish to gain essential knowledge in other important fields like Finance and General Management to get a overall knowledge on business.
I am very interested in Telecom and Automotive sectors and I would like to work in any of these fields if I have the opportunity and I think I will be able to perform to my best possible.
Indian Institute of Technology Bombay is one of the most premier and well-established institutions in India, which provides sound courses for both technical and management education. Being an engineer, doing MBA from IIT Bombay will be the best and beneficial for me since I believe that the MBA program of IIT Bombay will be able to couple my technical knowledge successfully with the managerial skills that will be taught. This will be the solid base on which I can build a successful career. Also I do believe that IIT Bombay will be able to hone my acquired skills and imbibe in me all the other important skill sets required to become an accomplished manager. For me being a part of the IIT fraternity will be my honour and privilege.

@Manish
My goal for the next two years is to equip myself with theoretical knowledge of business development, enhance my entrepreneurship skills, strengthen my team working proficiency, hone my leadership competence, and attain a firm internship to develop practical understanding of my core subject, Finance.
I plan to specialize in Finance and Economics, with keen focus on Investments. I am positive that my prior knowledge in Equity Investments and a knack to deal well with numbers would help me in my academic pursuits. I also wish to get a profound knowledge across functional domains like marketing and general management to efficiently build business know-how.
From the very beginning I have developed keen interest in numbers, facts and figures. My quick adaptability to graphs and diagrams makes my interpretation aptitude profound. I believe my strong reasoning makes me analyze situations aptly. Having being closely associated with family business, I have learned that allocation of monetary resources is done taking into account risks entailed in the projects. This has helped me understand the necessity to visualize a project's viability and laying plans for resource management. (I reckon future value of money is another aspect, important for understanding margin projections and project's feasibility. I have a keen interest in developing knowledge in above stated arena. Above reasons justify my deep interest in Finance and prophet a promising career in same.)
After completion of MBA, i am looking forward to work as an Equity Analyst in an Investment Bank and gain expertise in investments and understand the process of business development. I wish to develop leadership and entrepreneurship skills to equip myself with fine prints of doing business keeping in view my long term goal of venturing into Financial Consultancy.
From my work experience in IT I have realised that business thrives on developing new customers and more importantly their retention. This has made me understand the importance of customer satisfaction and how quality plays a significant role in achieving the same. I wish to use my present IT skills in developing an organised communication environment which shall provide excellent efficiency to work processes. My experience in Development as well as Testing has made me understand a great deal about modern day service industry work flow. I believe a firm knowledge in Finance, Marketing and General Management, would help me refine my overall business perception, and improve my vision.

here u go dude.
made some minor corrections.
there is a part i have enclosed within brackets.
i felt it was not needed.
u can keep them if u feel its important.


bharath

Guys,

Thanks a lot for your support and fast replies.

Hi guys, I have written GOAL essay after considering suggestionS from above posts. I dont know if content is STILL close to what it should be. I need critical comments and if possible an edited version of my essay.
Presently I have looked only for the content. I am not a writer. I would be more than glad, if someone can convert it into a writers langauge.

Hi manish,
well as ppl have rightly poined out in the above posts, instituites generally ask for a 5 year plan just to see how clear ur ideas are.
for most of the ppl, an MBA degree is something that they do because they dont have any other option(just like how an engineering degree has become now). very few actually know why they want the degree. so the instituite is just trying to figure out which category u r in.
no one can predict what 5 years from now is gonna look like. and the college knows that.
if u give hints of qualities in u that cld be improved after an MBA degree and say how u wld make use of it, ur what the college is looking for.
an enterprising nature, like urs, if said in the right way, is a perfect answer for the 5 year plan.
ur SOP is good. go on with it.


bharath

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Hi guys,

QUESTION
Please detail the five year plan for your career including the jobs you would like to have, how you would leverage your education, and how you would otherwise prepare yourself for this path. Tell us why your goals make sense given your plan and your background. (limit 500)

1. I have 2 yrs work ex... IT background with excellent extra curriculars.

"My short-term goals are to enhance my knowledge base in theoretical aspects of business, meet new friends and colleagues, and succeed in my studies. Fulfillment of these goals will lead to the longer-term goals which also constitute my post-graduation career plans, namely, building a solid and professional career in business. I believe that an MBA will assist me in furthering my academic and professional experience in order to achieve both short and long-term goals. "
"In long term I have an ambition to establish my own company. I aspire to own an internationally recognised firm, which could thrive on cutting edge technologies, excellent work force and outstanding work ideology. "

FIRST: DO U REALLY WANT TO START YOUR OWN BUSINESS AND CAN U ACTUALLY DO IT? Every third applicant writes this. Not even 2 will actually do it. So be really sure what is it that you want to start, business model, capital investment, resources, skills, core competencies, revenue model, etc.
What is cutting edge technology? What is outstanding ideology? Long run....in the long run we are all DEAD. So what is long run and what is "in the short term"?

These are all the words that you have written. Please have strong answers for all of these.

If you want to manufacture a reason for doing an MBA try this:

Mention your present skills, work-ex (not just no. of years), details of what u have achieved,etc.
My present education & work is limited only to the IT sector (I am assuming you are an engineer). I have learnt valuable lessons such as (WRITE SOME LESSONS THAT U CAN SUBSTANTIATE) and have enjoyed my stint working as----- in ----- vertical (MENTION WHICH VERTICAL and what you learnt).
However, I feel that my future career growth will depend on gaining knowledge of business across different industries and sectors. I feel that having knowledge only for a specific domain will limit my career growth. At the same time, leveraging my current skills and experience with sound academic knowledge of different aspects of business will help my understanding of Business Development (BD generally requires good tech knowledge and work-ex that u already have and some understanding of fin, mkting, hr,etc), which is what I aspire to do over the next 5 years.

TRY SOMETHING ALONG THESE LINES.

Hope this helps.
Best of luck.

Okay if cars/bikes is your passion, tell us how many cars/bikes you own? A passion typically does not mean that "you are 'just' excited about some thing".. a passion about something will make the person not only get interetsed in, but makes him gets involved in more than one ways....

i understand your point of view. it makes sense. But, regarding this I mentioned that I actively participate in GoKarting. If that is not a strong reason in itself... i'll have to think of something else.

for example if a person is passionate about travelling he just wont read lot of magazines/blogs about travel he will himself actually go ahead and do it... he will spend his money, time and energy into it...
So passion implies some action from you... not just passive excitement....

But, one cannot participate in F1.one can only follow it passionately.
Please suggest something. some ray of light.

All the writer guys... need help!!

One more SOP
1) Tell the Admission Committee about one thing in your personal or professional life for which you have a great deal of passion. And how it reflects your qualities.
I am with no clue how to start writing for this. This perhaps needs a very professional answer. Please someone suggest me a rough sketch. I am not a creative write !!
My passion is cars, bikes. I religiously follow F1. Each and every race, each and every driver, each and every track.
GoKarting is my fav sport (i like going 4 a Gokarting race in leisure time).
How does it relates to me
Risk. This shows I am audacious. Have risk taking ability.
In GoKarting, F1 one needs to be on full concentration through out the race.
It drives me crazy, makes my mind running for speed this is the way I work.
I am very good at multi-tasking. Can handle multiple things at a time. Again something related to speed.
My F1 idol, Fernando Alonso (Spain). Have been following him since his GoKarting days.
Please someone give me a rough idea or sketch ... thanks a lot

Okay if cars/bikes is your passion, tell us how many cars/bikes you own? A passion typically does not mean that "you are 'just' excited about some thing".. a passion about something will make the person not only get interetsed in, but makes him gets involved in more than one ways....

for example if a person is passionate about travelling he just wont read lot of magazines/blogs about travel he will himself actually go ahead and do it... he will spend his money, time and energy into it...

passion cannot be just followed on TV..you are not the only one who is interested in F1... but very few would have actually visited the race venue... in India people love cricket.. but very few are passionate... how many are going to WI for world cup?

So passion implies some action from you... not just passive excitement....

Ketan

Hi guys,

One more help

I have to write answer for this question for a 2 yr course in US.

QUESTION
Please detail the five year plan for your career including the jobs you would like to have, how you would leverage your education, and how you would otherwise prepare yourself for this path. Tell us why your goals make sense given your plan and your background. (limit 500)

1. They are strictly asking for my 5 year plan. Do they expect me to be very clear about? Or how it is going to be?
   
2. As of now I am equally inclined toward Finance, Marketing, Entreprenuership, Information Management System and General Management . Can I write in my SOP that, I am yet undecided with my fav stream, and the first year in college will help me decide the same?
   
3. I have 2 yrs work ex... IT background with excellent extra curriculars.

Usually the idea of asking such a question is to verify whether a person has a clarity in terms of long-term plans and whether the particular course fits into his scheme of things. So you have to be specific about your next five years after passing out.

The simplest approach to follow is to chalk out a plan which will fit with what the school is looking at, since if you dont follow that path, they are not going to come back and sue you ;-). I am not encouraging you to bluff your way but such questions are anyway hard to answer in terms of preciseness.

I guess veterans here can give you more helpful answer.

Ketan

One more SOP
1) Tell the Admission Committee about one thing in your personal or professional life for which you have a great deal of passion. And how it reflects your qualities.
I am with no clue how to start writing for this. This perhaps needs a very professional answer. Please someone suggest me a rough sketch. I am not a creative write !!
My passion is cars, bikes. I religiously follow F1. Each and every race, each and every driver, each and every track.
GoKarting is my fav sport (i like going 4 a Gokarting race in leisure time).
How does it relates to me
Risk. This shows I am audacious. Have risk taking ability.
In GoKarting, F1 one needs to be on full concentration through out the race.
It drives me crazy, makes my mind running for speed this is the way I work.
I am very good at multi-tasking. Can handle multiple things at a time. Again something related to speed.
My F1 idol, Fernando Alonso (Spain). Have been following him since his GoKarting days.
Please someone give me a rough idea or sketch ... thanks a lot

Hi guys,

One more help

I have to write answer for this question for a 2 yr course in US.

QUESTION
Please detail the five year plan for your career including the jobs you would like to have, how you would leverage your education, and how you would otherwise prepare yourself for this path. Tell us why your goals make sense given your plan and your background. (limit 500)

1. They are strictly asking for my 5 year plan. Do they expect me to be very clear about? Or how it is going to be?
   
2. As of now I am equally inclined toward Finance, Marketing, Entreprenuership, Information Management System and General Management . Can I write in my SOP that, I am yet undecided with my fav stream, and the first year in college will help me decide the same?
   
3. I have 2 yrs work ex... IT background with excellent extra curriculars.
   

I have tried writing this answer:
"My short-term goals are to enhance my knowledge base in theoretical aspects of business, meet new friends and colleagues, and succeed in my studies. Fulfillment of these goals will lead to the longer-term goals which also constitute my post-graduation career plans, namely, building a solid and professional career in business. I believe that an MBA will assist me in furthering my academic and professional experience in order to achieve both short and long-term goals. "

I dont know how to make it look like a perfect 5 year plan.

Also "how you would leverage your education, and how you would otherwise prepare yourself for this path"

I dont know what to write for this. can someone please explain?

"In long term I have an ambition to establish my own company. I aspire to own an internationally recognised firm, which could thrive on cutting edge technologies, excellent work force and outstanding work ideology. "

Should my this ambition be added somewhere... as they are asking for 5 years, I am confused.

I need help on this

Thanks a lot

Hello everyone,

Thanks everyone for the effort and time taken in developing this forum into one of a kind for M.B.A aspirants.
I would love to have folks here provide some insight into my SOP for MS in Medical Imaging.

Thanks in advance,

Suresh

para 1 is very positive.........nice opening :)
para 2 , well everyfamily wants their kids to have best education, so if u can reframe it, it wld sound good.
para 3, good explanation of qualification, i liked the way u took the topic from chemical engineering to software.......good one
para 4, u can actually cut down on the lines here, dont go into details. just say about ur teaching experince.
para 5&6 cld be conbined into one.
para 7- i dint like the promise part. sounds very childish.

one the whole a good write-up,
just try to cut down on the word count


bharath

Hello everyone,

Thanks everyone for the effort and time taken in developing this forum into one of a kind for M.B.A aspirants.
I would love to have folks here provide some insight into my SOP for MS in Medical Imaging.

Thanks in advance,

Suresh




"Education's purpose is to replace an empty mind with an open one", said Malcolm Forbes and this is very true in my case. It has provided me the oppurtunities to challenge myself and rise to fulfill my dreams.

Education has always been an emphasis within my family. They have guided me through my education choices, supported and provided the needful. My path to where I am now has been a blessing from a family who stood for nothing less than the best.

A diverse Chemical Engineering curriculum from the prestigious Andhra University has provided me a strong footing for my career choices. The years of undergraduate education have been an enriching experience - both academically and otherwise, they have made me determined to maintain the high levels of excellence throughout my pursuit. Driving my inspiration was the swing into computers and IT during the years. I mastered basic computer skills and furthered my interest into specific areas of software development and testing simultaneously outside of regular course work.

Ever since my gradation in 2001, career and family were two priorties that never thwarted my goals. After a few eventful years as a teaching assistant at an undergraduate level in Engineering subjects of Heat Transfer and Mass Transfer I stood at juncture where my biggest priorities contended. Some of the setbacks have made me realize how susceptible we are to the vagaries in life. A family medical emergency made me understand how valuable it is to have better medical detection systems and procedures.

What started then has since nutured and developed into a career path. Biomedical Engineering, a unique mix of Life sciences and Medicine is a promise for my aspiration. My calling belongs to the fields of Medical Imaging and Cardiovascular engineering at the esteemed ****. I find these fields dynamic with a potential for development and a need to deliver such technology to the common man.


Extensive course offerings under distinguished faculty and research facilities in cutting edge technologies have influenced me in choosing the program at ****. I look forward to a career in committed research where I can not only use my academic background to achieve my research goals but also make original scientific contributions to my field of interest. The small student to faculty ratio will help me pursue independent research projects for a focussed learning. The student body at the university will help me expand my network and provide a richer learning experience.

I hope the admissions committee finds my background, strengths and experiences commensurate with the requirements of Masters program. I promise myself and to the folks at the graduate school that I shall consistenly organize and perform with absolute determination to the program and beyond it.

ur SOP looks good.
but, considering that u gave some suggestions for on_da_rox, i see that the same errors are present in ur SOP.
u have not told anything about how NMIMS cld help in realizing ur dream,
and also the urge to start a business cld be heavily cross questioned.
if ur confident to answer that in the interviews, then ur SOP is good.
just try to improve the language and keep the points crisp


bharath

Hey thx for the feedback. But I haven't mentioned that I want to start my business and I don't intend doing that either. I have only mentioned that I have exposure to some facets of business. As far as NMIMS is concerned, I only meant being able to relate to its values. If you have gone through their site, you'll know how the qualities I have mentioned relate to the values of NMIMS.

Anyways I really appreciate that you took the effort to give your feedback.

Thank you once again.

Hey puys! Putting my Biographical Sketch for NMIMS. I would appreciate some valuable feedback. Thanks in advance.

ur SOP looks good.
but, considering that u gave some suggestions for on_da_rox, i see that the same errors are present in ur SOP.
u have not told anything about how NMIMS cld help in realizing ur dream,
and also the urge to start a business cld be heavily cross questioned.
if ur confident to answer that in the interviews, then ur SOP is good.
just try to improve the language and keep the points crisp


bharath

Just found this article.
Thought will be useful :)
Writing a Statement of Purpose? Say NO to copying!

Hey puys! Putting my Biographical Sketch for NMIMS. I would appreciate some valuable feedback. Thanks in advance.

I was born and brought up in Mumbai; a melting pot of different cultures. Coming from a closely knit family has imbibed a strong value system in me. Graduation in I.T. Engineering has honed my analytical, logical thinking abilities and made me understand how technology benefits business. I stood third my Final Semester in the I.T. department of my college. One of the highlights was that my Final Year Project got the highest marks in the college and appreciation from the Microsoft team.

Student years bring back fond memories of playing football on wet muddy grounds and frantic activity during submissions. I enjoy reading Ayn Rand, Paulo Coelho and business magazines. Swimming, rowing and watching F-1 racing are favourite pastimes.

Driven by my urge to learn the nuances of business, I joined my Family Business immediately after graduation. The experience of being involved with Sales & Marketing and implementation of ISO 9001:2000 has taught me valuable lessons like importance of understanding customer needs and focusing on improving quality. It has provided some basic understanding of facets of business and improved negotiation skills.

However, it has also made me realise that hands-on experience alone cannot replace sound academic knowledge. A broader understanding of different business functions and industries is essential to develop good managerial skills and robust business models. Combining my experience and self-belief with strong academic proficiency will aid me to become not just a good manager but also a capable leader.

thanx a lot for the analysis, bharatraj1 & prancing_tiger ...

@ prancing_tiger : its constructive criticism for me,nuthin harsh about it.in fact i feel its much better than the panelists ripping me apart over there

anyways,i m a fresher & due to the shortage of words,i couldnt substantiate the goal part futrther. iv actually segregated it into long term and short term ones,and entrepreneurship comes into the pic a whole lot later than it appears from the writeup.my immediate steps after mba wud be garnering experience and knowledge in that direction,thru work ex.
hopefully,the panelists talk more bout books or F1 or football than psyching me out....
anywayz,once again thanx a lot.,..

hi seniors...
NMIMS has asked candidates to carry a biographical sketch along with all the documents at the time of the PI. The word limit is 250 words,though i think 20 words here or there wont matter much. Ive written the following draft (its almost final,unless someone rips it apart with criticism).... Any kind of feedback is welcome,coz this is just my first attemtpt and i know i mustve screwed up a few things . here goes,,...

Thats about it. Looking forward to feedback,of any kind...

Nice Biography mate. However, if you are a fresher, you need to be careful about writing about entrepreneurship. You'll find 100s writing about starting their own business. Not more than 2 will actually do it. Even thats an optimistic figure. If you write about Auto Ancillary, they'll ask you why don't you join an Auto Ancillary firm. You will get to learn much more and therefore reach your goal faster.
What insights do you have about that Industry considering that you are a fresher??
Also NM and several other institutes have a special programme for Entrepreneurs so why don't you join that??
I feel writing about starting my own business seems a little far fetched. Instead focus on your personality and explain why NM suits you.

I'm sorry if you found my remarks very harsh. I just tried putting it from the Panelists' perspective.

ATB!!

hi seniors...
NMIMS has asked candidates to carry a biographical sketch along with all the documents at the time of the PI. The word limit is 250 words,though i think 20 words here or there wont matter much. Ive written the following draft (its almost final,unless someone rips it apart with criticism).... Any kind of feedback is welcome,coz this is just my first attemtpt and i know i mustve screwed up a few things . here goes,,...

its good dude,
that was crisp and very interesting.
if possible u cld add a few things about the college.
if the word count is already 250, then what u have looks good to me

bharath

hi seniors...
NMIMS has asked candidates to carry a biographical sketch along with all the documents at the time of the PI. The word limit is 250 words,though i think 20 words here or there wont matter much. Ive written the following draft (its almost final,unless someone rips it apart with criticism).... Any kind of feedback is welcome,coz this is just my first attemtpt and i know i mustve screwed up a few things . here goes,,...




I have pursued my education at varied educational institutions in multiple places, owing to the transferable nature of my fathers job, exposing myself to different cultures, thought processes and even attitudes. This has helped me evolve into an adaptable individual, capable of contributing effectively in diverse teams and environments. I have always strived for academic excellence, which is evident from my securing 1st rank in Xth board examinations and 3rd in XII.
Along with academic success, another thing that gives me immense pleasure and satisfaction is organizing & participating in extracurricular activities. I have always been eager to shoulder major responsibilities, as is reflected by my being the Chief Editor of the college magazine & Vice President of Mech-Soc. These duties have helped me further refine my leadership skills. Organizing technical symposiums & cultural festivals like Confluence, Literati etc has given me valuable insights into interpersonal relationships and group dynamics.
I am an avid bibliophile, having cultivated a voracious appetite for books ever since my school days. I am also passionate about Cricket, Football & Formula 1 racing.
Over a period of time, I see myself at the helm of an automobile ancillary unit which would form a key component of the supply chain of leading automobile manufacturers around the world. An MBA from NMIMS would help me acquire the requisite managerial skills & business concepts,giving me the necessary impetus for the achievement of my entrepreneurial dreams.


Thats about it. Looking forward to feedback,of any kind...

Perhaps u r mistaken.
Limit is 500 words dude, not 50. :)

oh ok
then i guess u can go ahead and add some facts, figures.
post the SOP, and i will have a look


bharath

i think it looks fine buddy
when the limit is just 50 words, i dont think we can add anything to it.
if u feel u need facts, u can go ahead and modify, but remember not to exceed 50 words
moreover plain facts feels boring to read.
get it checked by someone else too :)

bharath

Perhaps u r mistaken.
Limit is 500 words dude, not 50.

Hi , looks better. I got ur logic. but as u said u dint had time, so looking a bit crude. my view --> facts should be written.
would definitely like if it can be made better.
thanks
reply

i think it looks fine buddy
when the limit is just 50 words, i dont think we can add anything to it.
if u feel u need facts, u can go ahead and modify, but remember not to exceed 50 words
moreover plain facts feels boring to read.
get it checked by someone else too :)

bharath

Having been born and brought up in a business family, I have always been exposed to the vagaries of business and have involved myself with the general business discussions since the very beginning.
Four years back we planned to migrate our family business from Manufacturing to the Service sector. We acquired some land and planned to open up multiple businesses, One of them being a multi-purpose Banquet Garden and a big sized Auditorium. Even though the auditorium is located in the outskirts, we decided to stick on to our plans as we felt an emerging trend in smaller cities and a beleif that we cld pull it off with a good marketing stratergy. Hence, our advertising objective became not only to publicize innovate offerings, but also to make people visit the place and make them feel comfortable with the location.
as a part of this business initiative, i took up the resposibility to invite an artist, and paint the indorr area of the auditorium with a mural. the succesfull completion of the painting has invited a lot of media attention to this otherwise small town, and has catapulted our eshtableshment to one of the best run in the locality.
the process has left me a learned individual, having got the required skill set to lead and guide a team. and most importantly manage time and resources

i have made some changes to this
i hope it is helpful
my office has net only till 7 :(
so the last part might seem a little crude
if u think it is any good, let me know
i will work on making it better


bharath

Hi , looks better. I got ur logic. but as u said u dint had time, so looking a bit crude. my view --> facts should be written.
would definitely like if it can be made better.
thanks
reply

Having been born and brought up in a business family, I have always been exposed to the vagaries of business and have involved myself with the general business discussions since the very beginning.
Four years back we planned to migrate our family business from Manufacturing to the Service sector. We acquired some land and planned to open up multiple businesses, One of them being a multi-purpose Banquet Garden and a big sized Auditorium. Even though the auditorium is located in the outskirts, we decided to stick on to our plans as we felt an emerging trend in smaller cities and a beleif that we cld pull it off with a good marketing stratergy. Hence, our advertising objective became not only to publicize innovate offerings, but also to make people visit the place and make them feel comfortable with the location.
as a part of this business initiative, i took up the resposibility to invite an artist, and paint the indorr area of the auditorium with a mural. the succesfull completion of the painting has invited a lot of media attention to this otherwise small town, and has catapulted our eshtableshment to one of the best run in the locality.
the process has left me a learned individual, having got the required skill set to lead and guide a team. and most importantly manage time and resources

i have made some changes to this
i hope it is helpful
my office has net only till 7 :(
so the last part might seem a little crude
if u think it is any good, let me know
i will work on making it better


bharath

arre yaar
make it a little short
the question says brief explanation

I know, have to cut it 50 words short... but somehow not able to restructure it. thats why have put it here. i myself feel my SOP is a bit boring. Need expert editing. I am not a good writer.
Someone please help !!:(

@vinoth_kumar

well to answer your question u cant accept uve failed directly but u could probaly say like

Begin by emphasizing the extremely positive feedback youve got throughout your career and (if its true) that your performance reviews have been uniformly excellent.
Of course, no one is perfect and you always welcome suggestions on how to improve your performance. Then, give an example of a not-too-damaging learning experience from early in your career and relate the ways this lesson has since helped you. This demonstrates that you learned from the experience and the lesson is now one of the strongest breastplates in your suit of armor.
If you are pressed for a criticism from a recent position, choose something fairly trivial that in no way is essential to your successful performance. Add that youve learned from this, too, and over the past several years/months, its no longer an area of concern because you now make it a regular practice toetc.

Hi guys, this SOP is for ESADE.
Please give me suggestions. Also present word count is 550. I have to make it 500. Looking for good critical comments.
Everything written in this SOP is true and nothing is made up.

1. Write a brief explanation of your most important professional and personal achievements to date

arre yaar
make it a little short
the question says brief explanation

Hi guys, this SOP is for ESADE.
Please give me suggestions. Also present word count is 550. I have to make it 500. Looking for good critical comments.
Everything written in this SOP is true and nothing is made up.

1. Write a brief explanation of your most important professional and personal achievements to date


Guys I have deleted this SOP, soon going to put an updated one

Hello Folks,
Any suggestions what would be diplomatic answer when asked for a failure that we had encountered?